A dream I had─draft-1
I always think that I will become a leader in this world, and it came true in my dream last night. I dreamed I was an ancient king and I could control everything. If there were something I loved, I would resort to all means to capture them. Needless to say, I would kill everyone whose thinking was different from me.
One day the entire citizen wanted me to quit my power. I can’t bear the stress of the public opinion. Finally I committed suicide. Suddenly, I woke up. I thought that I did lot of cruel things to make this country better, but in vain. Maybe some of the cruel ancient emperors had the same feeling as I.
posted by candy @ 5:26 AM
6 Comments:
WOW!
you write very good!!!
"If there were something I loved, I would resort to all means to capture them."
我覺得這句應該用與過去事實相反的假設，因為夢不是過去式的嗎〈不太確定= =〉
"I thought that I did lot of cruel things to make this country better, but in vain." "lot of" should change to "a lot of" or "lots of".
第一句文法好像怪怪的，可以用and連接未來與過去嗎?(不太清楚)Your dream is spical.
Not bad but過程可再多一點
因為你大部分都只寫你的內心想法
沒有較具體的事情發生
You just cotrol everythig but not a good leader in the dream. Maybe you also set up a hopital or a school in the country in dream.
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