Translation-draf 1
Choosing a TV program carefully is very important. Though television is the most significance for offering information and entertainment. It probably has some disadvantages. The program which is full of violence and lust has some bad influences for teenagers. It is also harmful to our eyesight to spend much time watching TV. Therefore, we should choose the program which is good for our mentality. And the most important thing is do not be a couch potato.
Computer plays an impotant role in our daily life. It can help students to hand in their homework quickly and it also help piople send imformation in time. Yor are sure to fall in love with the computer as long as you turn on it. MOst of parents do not like their children depend on the computer too much. It wasts time especially to discuss on the BBS.
posted by candy @ 8:38 PM
7 Comments:
"Though television is the most significance for offering information and entertainment." should change into "Though television is the most significance channel to offer information and entertainment" is better.
*significance for offering information and entertainment.* should change to *informations and entertainment.*
"it also help piople send imformation in time." should change to "it also helps people send information in time."
"It wasts time especially to discuss on the BBS." "wasts" should change to "wates".
"MOst of parents", you can write "Most of the parents" or "Most parents".
"It can help students to hand in their homework "
maybe you can change into
"It can help students hand in their homework "
The program which is full"ed"....
program 是要複數還是單數要一致。
"Computer plays an impotant role in our daily life." change into "A computer play an important role in our daily life."
Your article is great.
Everyone uses the phrase "fall in love" , I think you can use another phrase "take a fancy to".
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