Autobiography-2-draft 1
After the Joint Entrance Examination for Senior High Schools, I enter the Department of Applied Foreign Language. My grade in class is not the best one, but I do well on pysical education. I get many award on sports, such as running and table tennis. I like learning English with my classmates due to we always have fun and we can change each ideas. Everytime I have a problem on learning, they can give me a big encourage.
I have made up my mind to enter Foreign colleage after my graduation from vocational high school. In addition, I also hope that I have any chance to go abroad to study. That can let me know many different things from different countries. In order to have my dream come true. I will do my best.
posted by candy @ 7:28 PM
7 Comments:
You can write more about you.
I think your table tennis experiences is a good subject to write.
"I also hope that I have any chance to go abroad to study."
any應該改成 a 或 the
Your title should write "Autobiography-2-Draft One".
"I enter the Department of Applied Foreign Language."
"enter" should write "entered".
"I like learning English with my classmates due to we always have fun and we can change each ideas. " change to " I like learning English with my classmates because we can change each ideas."
I hope your dream can come true soon.
Great!
Trust yourself. You can do it.
"My grade in class is not the best one, but I do well on pysical education. I get many award on sports, such as running and table tennis." "pysical" change to "physical";"award" add "s".
"In order to have my dream come true. I will do my best." Between "true" and "I" add "," not "."
if you work hard you will success
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